The Soones

[OFFSPR1NGDUDE3]

yo check out my band, THE SOONES. we're lazy so we don't have any full songs done (yet) but like, check us out. k? if you think that my band sucks then i don't wanna hear it so just keep that shit to yourself. but at least check out the site, it sure ain't the offspring, but.....
check us out:

SOONES (http://www.freewebs.com/soones)

[Chainsaw]

You really do suck

[OFFSPR1NGDUDE3]

You really do suck

fuck you we just started and we're only 14 years old. do you expect music as good as the offspring?

[Revolver-2005?]

pretty cool

[original_prankster]

One word: Lyrics. Uh...work harder on them. No Education is a bit iffy and I thought you guys were younger than 14 when I was reading it. Try to do something...that doesn't make you seem 9 or 10 years old. You use the word "fuck" wayyyyy too much. Ease down on that, okay? Think of something other than the word "fuck" to take it's place because it gets annoying after the first 10 seconds. The writing seems rushed. I should have said that earlier in this paragraph, but whatever. How long does it take you people to write your lyrics? And where do you come up with things like "YOu're Fatter Than My Mom"? Alot of people will probably hate that if you plan on rapping it in public. I thought it was just plain idiotic. PLEASE! Take ALOT of time to write. THINK about what you're writing. FINISH what you're writing. I can easily see that you guys are lazy. If you wAnt to be good, then do better things than "You're Fatter Than My Mom". Write something creative with...emotion. There was lack of emotion in that No Education song. It was your basic "leaders suck" type of thing that everyone's heard/done a million times. The chorus is the weakest part.

I KNOW you guys are only 14, and I'm not much older. But..."it's a long way to the top if you wanna rock and roll". I'm not trying to be rude, so please don't take any offense to this post. I'm trying to help and I don't even think I'm doing a very good job. :o

[Chainsaw]

fuck you we just started and we're only 14 years old. do you expect music as good as the offspring?

yes i do .

[Dirty Bertie]

I think you should rename yourself to the 'No ones'

[Brines]

I didn't think the song's lyrics were that bad. They were just very unoriginal. Try to write some parts that don't have rhymes. And if you do rhyme, don't make them so predictable. Example:

"Why should I listen to you?
You can’t tell me what to do!!!"

Everyone knows you're going to rhyme you with do. www.rhymezone.com. Don't force rhymes. If you can't think of a word to rhyme, then DON'T RHYME.

Just keep writin' man, you'll just get better.

[coke_a_holic]

Also, try to use a little more than just powerchords. I can EASILY pick out what you're playing listening to it once. Just mix it up a bit, you know?

[Manic subsidal]

if you think that my band sucks then i don't wanna hear it so just keep that shit to yourself.

So you make a thread about your band and only expect to hear good comments? Haha yeah right.

Here, take my piece of advice... GROW UP. Seeing as you can't write lyrics worth shit, how about you just record music with no lyrics? Or just wait until you're completely fucked in the real world realizing that you actually do need education to get somewhere in life. Maybe you'll learn something from that.

Idiots :rolleyes: